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Breath Bomb 

Don't you just hate when people have terrible breath? One time in the library, this kid was whispering right next me and I couldn't stand his breath. I mean did you actually brush your teeth this morning?

When you do confront someone about this they say something like "So does yours."

And then they're friends get mad at you for telling them this. I'm offended by his breath, where's my back-up, huh? It's his fault for not brushing his teeth. Maybe you just naturally have bad breath. But still, take a breath mint. There are many ways around this problem.

     Another time, I was in the audience for an assembly and this kid whispered a joke into my ear. I have never said a word to this kid about his breath, even though it's been going on since 1st grade. I say "Dude, you're breath stinks. Did you brush your teeth this morning" He gets so mad about this that he tells the teacher. Then the teacher yells at me for talking. Now, I'm supposed be mean for him not brushing his teeth. What the heck? 

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