Concrete Hurts
One day a kid named Jack was walking down the street when he saw his friend Mike. They decided to have a race 3 laps around the neighborhood on the sidewalk. They started the race, then they both got tired, and finally they got to the last lap. Then when Jack was about to cross the finish line, he tripped and his face went flying into the concrete. When Mike turned around to cheer, Jack's face was bleeding badly, and he had to be rushed to the hospital. The doctor said he had a crooked tooth, the main bleeding point was the nose, and his tooth was crooked, and his mouth was bleeding. This sort of happened to me in 1st grade.
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Comments (2)
1201NB said
at 10:15 am on Oct 7, 2011
Needs more of everything it was to short!!!
1205BP said
at 10:19 am on Oct 7, 2011
Good story, but the plot was very simple and it didn't have any "WOW!" factors in the story. It was good, but check for COPS because you had a few errors. Overall, the story was good, though.
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